Critique my Common App essay about failure!

College Essays
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<p>Shoot me a PM if you are willing to critique my essay. It’s not the best but I guarantee that its unlike every essay you’ve ever read; its about TWINKIES.</p>

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<p>bump to the top</p>

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<p>… you’ve ever read; its about TWINKIES.</p>

<p>-Replace semicolon with colon.</p>

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<p>Overall thoughts: thread is bad and you should feel bad.</p>

<p>0/12</p>

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<p>I’m embarrassed: you should have more important priorities right now</p>

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<p>I c wot u did thare</p>