Critique my Common App essay / idea

<p>Sup. I would like to discuss my Common App idea/essay with people. I have the skeleton of the essay basically done with but obviously the sentences and wording leave a lot to be desired. I really want to know whether or not i’m heading in the right direction and whether or not I should continue.</p>

<p>A couple of guidelines:</p>

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<li>Relatively high post count only </li>
<li>Preferably not applying to college this year</li>
<li>Decent college essay knowledge</li>
</ul>

<p>I am a parent and would be happy to offer guidance/feedback.</p>