Critique my common app essay on Nigeria?

<p>i need a lot of people to review it . </p>

<p>i will review yours if needed (:</p>

<p>PM me, i’ll be glad to read it :)</p>

<p>okay thank you ! any one else?
its about my sophomore year in Nigeria !
also, write if you need me to review yours !</p>

<p>I’ll read your essay if you read mine! PM me</p>

<p>Your Nigerian too??? Of course i’ll read yours for you!! :)</p>