Critique my essay about modeling

<p>essay had to do with passion, for USC, so just reply and i’ll PM it to you. Oh also, my writing style is a bit comic, not descriptive just so you know.
Also prefer people who are not applying to USC or who are not models and cannot steal the essay LOLZ.</p>

<p>I am not applying to USC! I am also not a model–not by any stretch of the imagination!
I could see how you’d be leery of me, since I only joined on Sunday, but if you like I will critique it for you.</p>

<p>pm it.
ill read it =]</p>

<p>go ahead :)</p>

<p>I’d love to read it!</p>

<p>And I’m no way model material. :-)</p>