<p>This is isn’t for the SAT even though I’d like to write a 12 essay when I’m a junior. I want my essays to be perfect. Right now, they’re choppy, bland, full of simple sentences and repetitive/junk words, and lack active verbs and good vocabulary. Also, my conclusions are very weak. </p>
<p>Here’s an unedited essay I wrote for school (for FCAT practice)</p>
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<p>Wouldn’t it be interesting being a reporter? You’d meet a myriad of people from all walks of life and would broaden your horizons learning their stories. Although, it would be unpleasant interviewing someone you abhor, or worse, someone you find boring, being assigned to interview a person of your choice would be wonderful. I would choose to interview Martha Stewart because she has a great work ethic, is adaptable career-wise, and was very stoic when she was involved in an insider trading scandal.</p>
<p>Without question, Martha Stewart has a great work ethic. As a child, she was a straight A student. When she was even younger, at age 3, she learned gardening from her father which must have been an arduous task. She also learned how to cook from her mother, how to make preserves from her grandparents, and how to make pies and cakes from retired bakers who lived next door. When she moved to Westport, Connecticut, she and her husband actually decided to take on the daunting task of renovating an 1805 farmhouse. Because of all this, I would ask her how she’s able to work so hard and what drives her. I would ask her what she does when she feels like giving up on tasks that require a tremendous effort.</p>
<p>Furthermore, she’s adaptable career-wise. At first, she had a modeling career and was very successful for a while, appearing in many television and print advertisements, until her daughter was born. She was a stockbroker, caterer, and manged a food store in Westport very efficiently. Also, because she catered for publishers’ parties, she gained many contacts which eventually lead to a book deal. She soon became an author and her first book was a best-seller. Even though Martha’s past jobs didn’t have much in common, she was still able to adapt and make the most out of the jobs she performed which I would definitely ask about. I would also ask her how she kept her career from becoming stale by pursuing new job opportunities. </p>
<p>Another reason I would choose to interview Martha Stewart is because of how she embodied stoicism during her unfortunate involvement in an insider trading scandal. Her television program was cancelled and the negative publicity was debilitating her business. She was eventually brought to trial in 2004 and was ordered to pay a $30,000 fine and serve a five month prison sentence. She decided to accept the sentence. Through all this, she was resilient and stoic. I would ask her how she dealt with her business almost coming apart at the seams and how she felt being constantly accused of doing something she didn’t believe she had done. Another question I would ask her is how she managed to write books and begin more television programs after this distressing experience. </p>
<p>In summation, because she has a great work ethic, is adaptable career-wise, and was very stoic concerning an insider trading scandal, Martha Stewart is a fascinating person I would interview if I had the choice. </p>
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<p>This essay is actually one of my better ones which is kind of sad. How do I improve? Please be as harsh as possible. I love constructive criticism and want to be the best writer I can be. </p>