Critique my essay? (specific topic)

<p>I wrote an essay as part of my UNC application…the question was </p>

<p>We tend to spend our time doing the things we know we do well—running because we’re good runners, or painting because we’re talented artists. Tell us about a time when you tried something for which you had no talent. How did it go?</p>

<p>I basically wrote about how Tupac’s “Changes” inspired me to learn the piano, despite not having lessons or anyone to teach me except a manual.</p>

<p>I just want to give it to some people to critique, I wrote this essay last night non-stop as my counselor wants all my application stuff by this Friday…</p>

<p>Thanks.</p>