Critique my Short Answer (150 words)?

College Essays
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<p>Okay so I’ve NEVER done this in my life and I admit I’m sort of afraid to give out my essay, even if it just the 150 word Common app essay. It’s actually really really not that great, but I dont really like the idea. However I’m gonna take a risk and ask anyone who would like to really help me with my 150 word essay to please reply. It’s short and to the point, but I dont know if it gets the point across. if you are not an 09er I will love you, and if you are I guess I will just have to trust you. </p>

<p>Be as brutally honest as you want.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it. I critique college essays on a daily basis, so you can count on me.</p>

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<p>Send it over to me if you want, but I’m an 09er, so it’s up to you.</p>

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<p>You can PM me if you want. </p>

<p>I’m applying this year but I’m very attached to my own and have already submitted my application.</p>