Critique: short common app essay about coin collecting

<p>Wrote this for the 150 word limit essay, and I was hoping I could get some opinions on it… as it’s pretty odd. It shouldn’t take long anyways, it’s about 4 lines.</p>

<p>Please?</p>

<p>Thanks in advance</p>

<p>If you don’t mind me reading it, PM me.
All my friends said I’m good at rating and criticizing.</p>

<p>i would like to read urs. pm me</p>