Critique so Far (Parents?)

College Essays
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<p>Hey, so I don’t have a full essay yet, just 1/4 - 1/2, but I’ve been stuck so I figure I’ll get some critique on what I have already.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it, PM me</p>

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<p>ok tenchar</p>

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<p>Yeah send it!</p>