Critiquing My Common App Essay

Hey all,

Just wanted to see if there was anyone out there willing to take a shot at reading my essay. I think it’s pretty good, but I’d rather be safe and get someone else to take a look at it.

If it helps, it’s prompt #2 about failure and mine is specifically about my experience with getting caught trespassing top of a school roof and the unintended consequences that came from it.

Thanks in advance.

Bump?

PM me. I am a fellow HS senior but I’ve proofread a few friends essays.