Cynical College Essay; anyone care to read?

College Essays
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<p>I’ve seen lots of thread asking others to read their college essay and give some critique… so I thought “why not I try it” =D</p>

<p>This college essay’s topic was (word limit 250-500):
“the way you see the world - the people in it”</p>

<p>This is the first draft; I have read over it once so I’m expecting lots of errors :/.</p>

<p>Thank you so much for taking the time to even consider reading my essay =P.</p>

<p><em>Note</em> I will PM you my essay if you so desire. I refuse to post it on an open forum for obvious reasons.</p>

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<p>Hi lastdayx52!</p>

<p>I’m interested in critiquing your essay. PM me first so that I can send you my e-mail address. However, in return, you must tell me where you are applying using this essay (to get a general feel of your competition) and you must also critique on my essays in return. </p>

<p>(Yes I’m '09)</p>

<p>Good luck!
-ab2013</p>

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<p>I’d like to take a peek</p>