<p>Hello everyone,</p>
<p>I have been going through some tough times lately and as a result might be dismissed from my university. I was just wondering if anyone would like to critique and/or make suggestions for my paper. Even if you only point out a single gramatical or spelling error I would appreciate any help I can get. It is supposed to be anywhere from 500-1000 words. Currently at 568, but I am not completely finished yet. Here is what I have so far.</p>
<p>Thank you</p>
<p>Personal Statement</p>
<pre><code>The reason for my poor performance is due to depression I have had on and off the past couple years. I should have met with someone about my psychological health, but I often find it hard to get the help I need the most. I have often found it hard to get help from others because I feel like I am being a burden on them or wasting their time. I understand this does not excuse my poor performance and it was quite foolish of me to go so long without talking to someone about my problems. Being emotionally compromised I could not perform well in my courses. What I should have done was taking a leave of absence or simply withdrawal temporarily. I foolishly thought I could handle it in my current state and I kept deluding myself into thinking that I would be fine. I was too embarrassed about my own problems to tell anyone about them and what my parents would think if I told them I wanted to take a leave of absence. My problems became especially bad last quarter which is why my performance was lower than usual. I was so depressed that I would often not be able to motivate myself to get out of bed. I am not taking Prozac any longer which is the medication which I was taking for a while for my Tourette’s syndrome. I have no idea if this adversely affected my state of mind, but I stopped taking it because I felt I could control the tics without medication. This may have been another foolish mistake as I probably should have consulted with my physician about going off the medicine. One thing I definitely need to do is get some psychological help with my depression.
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<p>I have been planning on changing my major to biochemistry for about a year now and had even met with the advisor to find out the steps I needed to take. I plan on changing my major as soon as possible. I have been taking courses for my new major and it was going well until this past quarter. To succeed I just need to receive counseling continuously until the counselor thinks I am no longer in need of services. With the right state of mind I have the ability to succeed. If I continue to take courses required for biochemistry I should be able to change my major next quarter. I plan on taking summer sessions if possible to help make up for lost time and to increase my GPA. I am currently enrolled in UWP 101 which is one of the courses the College of Biological Sciences wanted me to complete. Retaking BIS 102 and receiving a good grade should be the final thing I need to do to switch majors after completing UWP 101. </p>
<p>I really do enjoy being here at UC Davis and being a fourth year student I would love to be able to continue so that I can finish up my undergraduate education. If I graduate I will be the first one in my family with a college education. If I am allowed to continue I promise to make a real effort of communicating with people around me if I am having difficulties. I will also be sure to regularly meet with my adviser to make sure I am on the right track.</p>