So I wrote a personal statement but I don’t know if I should submit it. In it, I talk about how I am such a precautious/glass half-empty person due to my experiences when I came to America as well as with my parents. And then at the end, I would say something along the line of my parents didn’t know how much influence they had on me; and also that I am proud to be a glass half-empty person.
Colleges may not want pessimistic students.
Think about it from their perspective. They’ll probably think that however you acted coming to America, you’ll act the same way coming to college. Both are foreign environments. It’ll be interesting for them to see how you pull off putting a positive spin on being a pessimist. As for being influenced by your parents, it really depends on how much they influenced you. It would be good to demonstrate some level of independence, since you might be leaving them and it shows maturity.
This makes you sound like damaged goods.
The point of the college essay is not bare your soul and be brutally frank. The point of the college essay is to get the college to say YES.
It doesn’t sound like the type of essay that will cause a reader to think that they want you on campus but you never know. I’ll take a look if you’d like.
This is sort of like telling the admissions committee that you are Debbie Downer. I wonder if “glass half empty” means the same to the OP as it does to others.
You may be able to put a more positive spin on it if you say you’re proud to be a “pragmatist” or “realist” (if that applies), and give some examples of how/why that has helped you or shaped you.