Does anyone mind giving me feedback on my essay?

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<p>Anyone want to read, edit, comment on my essay? It’s a 690 words why transfer essay. It’s probably too long and wordy and I need someone to help me shortened it.</p>

<p>THX</p>

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<p>bump…bump…anybody…please??</p>

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<p>I sent you a PM.</p>

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<p>Thx again ADad!
Anybody else want to edit my essay?</p>

<p>FYI, I want to transfer to Conn Coll for fall 08.</p>

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<p>email me. <a href="mailto:tyac.sg@gmail.com">tyac.sg@gmail.com</a></p>

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<p>i’ll try to help. my email is <a href="mailto:junelizabeth@gmail.com">junelizabeth@gmail.com</a> if that is easier</p>

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<p>Sure email me at <a href="mailto:xeacon@gmail.com">xeacon@gmail.com</a></p>

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<p>Sure, email me <a href="mailto:RayAllen333@gmail.com">RayAllen333@gmail.com</a>
put College Confidential on the subject of the email; i hate freaking viruses and random emails</p>