Does everyone, even those who choose to live alone, need peeeeeps?

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<p>Do they?</p>

<p>Here’s my response: </p>

<p>Everyone, even recluses, needs a network or some sort of family. Humans are made to be social animals, meaning they need people to interact with others to sustain their own happiness. Loners shown from all sorts of fictional as well as realistic feature characters who, in the end, need companionship. Several examples that show this can be found in literature and on television.</p>

<p>As demonstrated by the main protagonist, Jay Gatsby still wants a loving gamily by his side. Grown up hating the rural life, Mr. Gatsby left home and enlisted in the army, hoping to gain and win a woman, a lover into his life. While training and waiting before shipping him to Europe, he met a girl named Daisy, whom he claimed to marry someday. ALthough he remained a recluse for most of his life, Mr. Gatsby admitted to the narrator that he longs for a wife and a family someday. Mr. Gatsby is a great example of someone who chooses to live alone in his big mansion in South Egg; however, he still wants to start a family with Daisy. And he attempt extreme feats to reach his goal.</p>

<p>Another “loner” is Hester Prynne from the Scarlet Letter. Basically during the colonial times, to commit adultery is essentially to cut all social ties from society. Everyone scorns and detests you. People mock and emotionally torture you. The horrors continue. One of these adulters during this time period is young, innocent Hester Prynne. Hester, who had a child with the minister, walks alone of the Provincial streets in MA. However, such horrible treatments bound to make Prynne explode sometimes! But she does’t. Throughout the novel, the readers learn through the dialogs and the tests that the only reason Hester Prynne isn’t goign insane is because of her child, Pearl. Pearl keeps Hester from crying till he mom has no more tears. Pearl comforts her mom when all the kids point finger at them. Pearl essentially is the antidote for her mom. Hester Prynne is closed from society; but because of the help from her daughter, she is okay. </p>

<p>The last example can be found in one of America’s favorite comedy sitcom, the Big Bang Theory. This continuing series depict four extremely nerdy introverts who may be smart academically, but less than subpar socially. One of these characters is Dr. Sheldon Cooper who constantly repeats how amazing life would be without loud people, noisy neighbors, and obstinate delivery boys. However, despite all of his claims, he still wants human companionship from his roommate, Leonard, and girlfriend, Amy. In one example, he was even caught allowing a human to hug him for comfort. Nerdy introverts like Sheldon Cooper even need family, friends to appease though times. </p>

<p>Call it a clan, network, buds, etc, regardless of what it is called, you need one. Reclusive introverts need them during bad times. Hester Prynne stayed sane because of family. And Jay Gatsby lived alone pitifully without the warmth of a wife. As shown in literature ad film, all humans need people in order to survive. </p>

<p>Grade and Critique!</p>

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<p>Com’on guys!! Pwease :(</p>

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<p>Firstly, the few instances of the word “you” that appear in the essay should be replaced with “one” or something of the sort. Also, it seems to me that there were points where your arguments stayed a little too close to the sources- to the point of feeling like the essay is a report on the examples rather than the use of examples to make an outside argument. </p>

<p>What I’m trying to say is, for example, your paragraph pertaining to the Big Bang Theory does fine in illustrating that the characters in the show need each other; but it doesn’t quite establish that severe recluses need companionship. I feel this is because the cited characters on the show don’t qualify as recluses.</p>

<p>I also feel it would be better to make this argument by using cases of real individuals throughout history. The problem with using fictional depictions of human need for others is that, being fiction, the story could be molded to make happen whatever the author desires. I could easily write a novel about a recluse that needs no one and is very happy and well-adjusted alone. I feel your case would be stronger if you cited actual introverts such as Vincent van Gogh, J.D. Salinger, and Emily Dickinson.</p>

<p>Overall, I think you did a decent job. I feel the examples used were pretty strong despite being fictional as opposed to historical. There was some room for improvement. I would probably give it a three or four out of six.</p>

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<p>Thanks! I couldn’t think of any introverts :(</p>

<p>How would actual introverts such as Vincent van Gogh, J.D. Salinger, and Emily Dickinson support the topic though? For E. DIckinson, she didn’t even leave her house?</p>

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<p>For J.D. Salinger, you could cite the fact that, even though he was an extreme recluse, he still married. This indicated that he felt he needed at least one person in his life. </p>

<p>As for Van Gogh and Dickinson, the picture is similar. Their loneliness and lack of personability basically cost them their sanity. Dickinson’s extreme seclusion and perceived madness had a visceral influence on her writings, as they often dealt with misery and morbidity. The result of Van Gogh’s case was particularly severe, as he was driven to commit suicide at the age of 37.</p>

<p>These cases indicate that the vast majority of people have little quality of life and ability to deal with reality when they are truly alone.</p>