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<p>hey guys…</p>

<p>im writing a commonapp essay about the most influential person in my life…<br>
i wrote the first 300 words or so and i was wondering if i could get input on it.</p>

<p>i figured, i should get some opinions about waht i have so far before i try to finish it…</p>

<p>PM me if you’d care to read!
thanks</p>