<p>I recently received some criticism on my common app activities essay that I wasn’t emphasizing the right things. What I wrote about was what I observed of the hospital environment and how I feel I would contribute to it in college and beyond. I’m being purposely vague here as I’m not keen to get into the details of my essay, but you’ll have to trust that I’ve included some unique ideas and have written it well.</p>
<p>The criticism I got was that I didn’t talk about what I contributed to the hospital. I was told that it was too much about my thoughts and not about my actions or how I made a difference. The thing is that what I actually did was work on inventorying and cleaning medical equipment. Sure, parts of this were interesting, but that’s not what I feel the main importance of my experience was. I think it was about what I learned and what it got me thinking about for the future. Since many of you probably know more about these essays than I do, is my direction ok or have I missed the point of the prompt?</p>