<p>I really need someone to look over my essay. It’s about not being able to go with my choir to a foreign country. I really want to use this topic, but I’m afraid my essay is totally horrible and the adcoms won’t want to read it.</p>
<p>So I’m basically asking for someone who can be brutally honest and give me some pointers.</p>
<p>Please help!</p>
<p>I’ll show no mercy when I read your essay! 
Just PM me.</p>
<p>Your story is very touching, clarinette52!
I’m so sorry that you couldn’t go on the trip. :(</p>
<p>Like I promised, I’ll show no mercy.
Umm…Try not to sound cheesy. For example, the last sentence of your essay (“…a better member of society”) doesn’t really show much thought. You know what I mean? Try to come up with a more personal conclusion.</p>
<p>I wish you the best of luck!</p>
<p>Thank you for your help!</p>
<p>sure, I’ll read it.</p>
<p>i’ll critique it for you!</p>
<p>PM it to me!</p>