essay about playboy

i knew that would grab ur attention.
please comment on this! it’s due in two hrs!!

UC: discuss what values and characteristics you as an individual maintain and desire.

All that is noble is in itself of a quiet nature, and appears to sleep until it is aroused and summoned forth by contrast.

  • Johann Wolfgang Von Goethe

<pre><code>Maybe it is the Libra in me, but I am a person of balance. In my life I am always seeking ways to create just compromises. Usually the situations in need of compromise that permeate my life are pretty standard, and more often than not, I can reach a reasonable solution without compromising my integrity or my enjoyment. But this past year, a much larger issue came into play when the majority of my days were spent in two places: the beige, fluorescent-lit cubicle of a prominent investing firm and the infirmary of a convent. Though the word “firm” is about all these places share in common, together they helped me realize the importance of living a balanced and meaningful existence.
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All of my life I have always wanted to have a career in investing. I love the adrenaline rush of the daily highs and lows of the Dow Jones Industrial Average, I often cite compound interest as the 8th wonder of the world, and to the best of my knowledge, I am the only student at my high school capitalizing on the exponential benefits of an early Roth IRA. So of course when I found out I had been selected as an intern at Merrill Lynch this summer, I was pretty excited. What I quickly came to realize, though, was that although the job itself was very interesting, I didn’t leave the workplace feeling any better about myself. Sure, I was becoming a savvy businesswoman, but in no way was I really making any worthy contribution to society.<br>
When I entered the 4th floor of the convent, I was immersed into a totally different atmosphere. The nuns, who range in age from 80 to 102 had a comforting demeanor that I had never experienced before. I remember asking myself early on “how can these nuns be so content, lying in their beds dying without a penny to their name?” Well, after hearing their stories, my question was quickly answered. They were content because of their “carpe diem” perspective on life. As I would help Sister Sebastian-a stroke victim and my favorite sister- exercise, she would tell me of her trips to Rome, studying Latin, one of our many shared interests. On other days, she would tell me of her experiences down in Harlan Kentucky spearheading a school for impoverished children in the Appalachian Mountains. Her life seemed so interesting and worthwhile to me, definitely undermining my cut and dry definition of success, which meant getting married and working hard for monetary gain.
So near the end of the summer, all of my thoughts culminated until I finally asked myself how I could balance my aspirations to have a successful career in finance, but still be able go to bed at night, knowing I made a difference in the world. This got my juices flowing, so to speak, and I realized that in order to truly do that, I would have to be like the sisters of Notre Dame and incorporate service into my career, instead of making it extraneous. So I have decided that when I become a certified financial planner, I will allot a certain number of hours per week to go into the inner-city and educate people there about investing, and give them the opportunity to start saving for their own little “nest egg”. For me, this seems like a worthwhile endeavor, because I think it’s important that people know that their poverty does not have to be cyclical and that they can accumulate a sizeable sum by just contributing a small amount each week. This is something that I am very excited about.
Though, I haven’t made it a huge point to list my values in this essay, I believe that actions speak louder than words.

<p>how can i make a better conclusion???</p>

<p>“Though the word “firm” is about all these places share in common, together they helped me realize the importance of living a balanced and meaningful existence.”</p>

<p>That does not make sense. Fix it.</p>

<p>“was immersed into a totally different atmosphere” I think the correct usage is “immersed in a different atmosphere.”</p>

<p>Oh God, this essay is somewhat of a train wreck. Have you gotten your teachers to look at it? </p>

<p>“all my thoughts culminated until…” I don’t think thoughts culminate by themselves - they have to culminate in something. Like, “all my hard work culminated in that bold, black A”. They don’t just culminate.</p>

<p>And “got my juices flowing, so to speak,…” don’t do that. Say “This prompted me to…” or “That reversed the orientation of my goals” but don’t use petty colloquialisms. (informal language)</p>

<p>You can trust me.I help other students with their essays at school all the time. SAT Verbal-780; accepted EA to MIT.</p>

<p>Damn you for tricking me. I wanted to hear about Playboy. :)</p>

<p>It’s like I discovered a cure for an age-old disease. I know how to create a better, more secure world for those around me, and I intend to employ my knowledge in the fight to cure the poverty that plagues the most destitute of our world. Though I haven’t made it a huge point to list my values in this essay, I believe that actions speak louder than words.</p>

<p>Just a thought. See how you like it.</p>

<p>CORRECTION: It’s like I’ve discovered</p>

<p>sorry.</p>

<p>You will get more answers if you post using a more appropriate title. People like me click, get ticked off, and move on. False advertising doesn’t work on CC.</p>

<p>thank u so so much hiki, you are my saving grace…here is the finished copy!
All that is noble is in itself of a quiet nature, and appears to sleep until it is aroused and summoned forth by contrast.

  • Johann Wolfgang Von Goethe </p>

<pre><code>Maybe it is the Libra in me, but I am a person of balance. In my life I am always seeking ways to create just compromises. Usually the situations in need of compromise that permeate my life are pretty standard, and more often than not, I can reach a reasonable solution without compromising my integrity or my enjoyment. But this past year, a much larger issue came into play when the majority of my days were spent in two places: the beige, fluorescent-lit cubicle of a prominent investing firm and the infirmary of a convent. Together these two atmospheres, that could not have been any more different, helped me to realize the importance of living a balanced and meaningful existence.
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<p>All of my life I have always wanted to have a career in investing. I love the adrenaline rush of the daily highs and lows of the Dow Jones Industrial Average, I often cite compound interest as the 8th wonder of the world, and to the best of my knowledge, I am the only student at my high school capitalizing on the exponential benefits of an early Roth IRA. So of course when I found out I had been selected as an intern at Merrill Lynch this summer, I was pretty excited. What I quickly came to realize, though, was that although the job itself was very interesting, I didn’t leave the workplace feeling any better about myself. Sure, I was becoming a savvy businesswoman, but in no way was I really making any worthy contribution to society.<br>
When I entered the 4th floor of the convent, I was immersed in a different atmosphere. The nuns, who range in age from 80 to 102 had a comforting demeanor that I had never experienced before. I remember asking myself early on “how can these nuns be so content, lying in their beds dying without a penny to their name?” Well, after hearing their stories, my question was quickly answered. They were content because of their “carpe diem” perspective on life. As I would help Sister Sebastian-a stroke victim and my favorite sister- exercise, she would tell me of her trips to Rome, studying Latin, one of our many shared interests. On other days, she would tell me of her experiences down in Harlan Kentucky spearheading a school for impoverished children in the Appalachian Mountains. Her life seemed so interesting and worthwhile to me, definitely undermining my cut and dry definition of success, which meant getting married and working hard for monetary gain.
So near the end of the summer I finally asked myself how I could balance my aspirations to have a successful career in finance, but still be able go to bed at night, knowing I made a difference in the world. This prompted my realization that in order to truly do that, I would have to be like the sisters of Notre Dame and incorporate service into my career, instead of making it extraneous. So I have decided that when I become a certified financial planner, I will allot a certain number of hours per week to go into the inner-city and educate people there about investing, and give them the opportunity to start saving for their own “nest egg”. For me, this seems like a worthwhile endeavor, because I think it’s important that people know that their poverty does not have to be cyclical and that they can accumulate a sizeable sum by just contributing a small amount each week. This is something that I am very excited about. It’s like I’ve discovered a cure for an age-old disease. I know how to create a better, more secure world for those around me, and I intend to employ my knowledge in the fight to cure the poverty that plagues the most destitute of Cincinnati. Though I haven’t made it a huge point to list my values in this essay, I believe that actions speak louder than words.</p>

<p>lol. good job. tell me, to which UC are you applying?</p>

<p>Yeah, I usually respond to essay requests, but when people lie and are like just kidding, it ticks me off and I just leave. You’ll get more responses with truthfulness, let me tell you</p>

<p>bcwannabe09, why are you being an idiot? Its a really low thing to do to post fake titles. On regular message boards, you’d be banned.</p>

<p>dudes, it’s no big deal. Imagine that you were in the same situation as this kid. give him a break.</p>

<p>ha sorry guys, I didn’t really think about it as being immoral…I just needed to cultivate some interest FAST! The sad thing is, that’s that usually most easily done through sexual innuendos…</p>

<p>Hiki, this is actually for the University of Cincinnati Honors Plus Program, it’s a super hard program to get into! I can’t thank you enough…I’m a girl by the way.</p>

<p>of course. ha. i feel embarassed. i immediately associated the playboy comment with a guy and then i guess your essay didn’t really make me think otherwise. But how is a guy going to work in a convent? i should have thought of that.
Well, good luck with your Honors program. I hope for the best.</p>

<p>haha im not usually crude, i swear…lol…thanks again!</p>

<p>playboy university - now that would be my dream school</p>

<p>I just assumed you were a male as well…not that that changes my opinion on false advertising</p>

<p>agh, you tricked me</p>

<p>Its sort of hard to read it</p>

<p>Make more sentences out of the really long ones</p>

<p>It’s very wordy. I agree with hikki’s observations. Also put spaces between the paragraphs to make it easier on your readers here. Then to examine each sentence and delete the unnecessary words.</p>

<p>So near the end of the summer I finally asked myself how I could balance my aspirations to have a successful career in finance, but still be able go to bed at night, knowing I made a difference in the world. </p>

<p>Recently, I thought of ways to balance a successful career in finance with community service, knowing I’d make a difference in the world.</p>

<p>This prompted my realization that in order to truly do that, I would have to be like the sisters of Notre Dame and incorporate service into my career, instead of making it extraneous.</p>

<p>Like the sisters of Notre Dame, I want to incorporate service into my career, instead of making it extraneous.</p>

<p>Or something to this effect–I’m not trying to change the sentences but to make your writing clearer and simpler, calmer and better.</p>