Essay Critique help..please!

<p>Hi everyone =)
Uhm I just joined this sight and I’m really new at this, so anyone’s help would be much appreciated…I just need people to read my short response essay and tell me if it flows, sounds sincere, and there’re mistakes I need to fix. I thank you in advance =)</p>

<p>oh btw is there another way I can send anyone my essay without posting it here? I know there something called PM but how to I send ppl my essay through PM?</p>

<p>click the blue link for my screen name to the left of this message and “Send a Private Message to elytron”</p>