Essay Critique?

<p>Hey everyone, Happy New Year’s Eve. :slight_smile: </p>

<p>Would anyone be willing to look over my essay and let me know if there’s anything to fix? My topic is: Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence. I did it on my best friend who helped me capture my ambition back. If you could, I’d really like the essay back by tomorrow, 9 PM Pacific time latest. Reason being that the application is due Monday and I want to turn it in before and make sure everything goes through alright. </p>

<p>If anybody would be willing to, I’d really appreciate it. Thanks so much!</p>

<p>No one wants to help out a stressed out high school senior? Boo…</p>

<p>I have finished my application!
PM it over!~~</p>