essay edit please

Colleges & Universities Cornell University
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<p>I just got a really bad critique from my friend. haha it’s pretty depressing but I feel lyk I should get more critique from ppl. can somebody edit my essay please???</p>

<p>*here’s some important points </p>

<p>-maybe too boring
-maybe the vocab levels arent consisntent. ( I mean it may not sound like one person’s voice. there are some big words in some parts and regular everyday words in some other parts…)
-maybe not good enuf for ivy</p>

<p>I only have few days left until the deadline and this is killing me. I have many more to write… o Lord…</p>

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<p>i’ll read (blah blah i have to have more characters)</p>

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<p>pm u? (blah… long enuf now)</p>

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<p>i’ll read it too.
you can pm me i guess.</p>

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<p>pm me if you like</p>

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<p>pm me too!!!</p>

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<p>guys i would really not advice u to PM ur essays to fellow RD applicants…just to guys already at Cornell and if u want EDers</p>

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<p>Why?? ----- this worries me b/c i’ve already sent it to 2 ppl…</p>

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<p>plagiarism . . .</p>

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<p>most people should have enough decency and sense. which makes me think. sigh…</p>

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<p>i’m extremely worried now. though i dont think people’d want to copy my essay. it’s not that good neway… but still this worries me. </p>

<p>lets not steal other ppls work…! I dont think its worth a shot anyway…wut if u get caught? thats a biggg trouble.</p>

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<p>Aren’t essays suppose to be written as only you could’ve written them? Should not they be somewhat personal?</p>

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<p>exactly…which is why when an essay is copied…the admission officer can make it out, especially if the 2 essays are one after the other</p>