<p>Topic: Are bad choices and good choices equally likely to have negative consequences?</p>
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<p>Could someone please grade and comment on my essay? It’s greatly appreciated! Thanks in advance!</p>
<p>please help! Thanks</p>
<p>any one? please</p>
<p>It’s not necessary to restate the prompt.
That’s a nice quotation provided in your intro.
Why not interpret what the quotation means to you
and how it relates your examples that will later be discussed.
Also, intro should be at least 3 sentences.</p>
<p>You can elaborate more about Bush’s plan.
Why did it seem like a good plan?
Before him, Reagon spent a lot of money in deficit
His re elction may not be his only failure,
Wasn’t there also inflation and unemployment?
You can also add on these ideas.</p>
<p>mockingbird took place in 1850s (but that’s minor)
Tom was “considered” inferior to Mayella
He is not really inferior, everyone just thinks he is.</p>
<p>3rd example ::
As reflected “from”
You can talk about how consumers buy many things they don’t need off the margin
They think it’s okay, and they can pay it all back later</p>
<p>Conclusion:
Being a little specific in your examples wouldn’t hurt ;;
As seen from the decisions of Bush, Tom, and the consumers
or Bush’s tax cuts, Tom’s concern for Maybelle and the consumer’s ( can’t think of a word to put here for now)
You sound like youre rushing to finish your essay by placing the quote at the last sentence. You can once again, explain why good choices are just like bad choices.</p>
<p>Overall::</p>
<p>If you developed your examples further, your essay would be better.</p>
<p>Grade :: about 7 or 8 out of 12</p>
<p>Hope this helped :)</p>
<p>Thanks a lot for your feedback! Just wondering, how would I fit all of those details in 2 pages?</p>
<p>uh… you can write the words not so spaced out.
& most essays have 2 examples
you have 3, so you can take out one if you like.
Did you really come up with 3 examples in 30 minutes?
I have problems coming up with examples (a_a)"
&& your welcome</p>
<p>any more opinion?</p>
