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PROMT: Robert frost said, You are educated when you have the ability to listen to almost anything without losing your temper or self-confidence. Please tell us about an experience-either yours or someone elses-that either supports or contradicts Frosts statement.
As the television blared in the background, livid voices could be heard screaming at each other across the living room. You should have studied harder, because after seeing this score, I can see that you certainly did not study at all for this test! My parents, who usually were supportive every time I hadnt achieved my goal, decided to chastise me for not getting a good enough score on my test. Being reproved many times before, I expected much of the same lectures that I usually got. Unfortunately, my assumption was very incorrect, and my parents did the antithesis of my expectations.<br>
Instead of receiving an unpleasant lecture about how I needed to do better next time and study, my parents shouted about how I will not be able to do well in life because of this one test score. The truth was that I actually had studied for the test, but somehow, during the middle of the test my brain seemed to go into a relapse, and shut itself down. As I tried to explain myself and elude any punishment, my parents anger wasnt mitigating anytime soon. No matter what words came out of my mouth, the situation could not be ameliorated.<br>
Suddenly, and out of the blue, my anger arose from the depths of my body and took over me. I began to should at the top of my lungs about how I was trying my best, and that not all people are geniuses that are able to ace every test there created on the face of this earth. Vociferously, I started a tirade about how they needed to support me through everything, and not be condescending, when I broke down and burst into tears. I felt as if the entire world was banging on my head, and that I was a failure in life. I lost all my self-confidence-that that taken me my entire life to create-in less than five minutes.<br>
Watching me cry uncontrollably, my parents softened quite a bit, and we had a discussion regarding the incident that just occurred. We talked about diverse subjects, ranging from my life to their lives, and in the end, we felt as if we had learned much about each other.<br>
By losing my temper and self-confidence, the discussion occurred, and I learned control my thinking, and try to witness situations not only in my way of thinking, but other peoples also. I became educated in the art of speaking, which has and will continue to help me throughout my life. Yet, to become educated, I had to go through so much. In other words, to become educated, I had to lose my temper and self confidence, and without doing that, I would not have become educated, and be able to listen to almost anything without losing my temper and self confidence.