Is this intro too corny? I’m thinking I should start out with a description of a certain passage of a song instead.
The twenty three words that form this sentence may very well serve as the most decisive twenty three words of my life. With the thousands of essays that you must peruse, the odds of devising a hook that is not overly trite are certainly not in my favor. Furthermore, the second that your eyes meet the page, the words begin evoking subconscious, and even conscious, reactions and thoughts. Fortunately, though, I can tangibly control these evocations through the use of subliminal messages within the text. With that being said, let us shift our focus towards me. My personality is analogous to a kaleidoscope, as it is both colorful and multi-faceted. Similarly, my thoughts and interests often shift, and amidst all of this change, one thing remains staticmy passion for music. Rhetorically speaking, my musical obsession extends beyond strategically placed diction; physically speaking, the obsession extends beyond just my musical endeavors, as it influences absolutely every aspect of my life (reword this).