<p>Hey guys,</p>
<p>The SAT is coming inevitably and I studied a lot for it. Im kinda satisfied with my performances in CR, M and even WR, at least when it comes down to the MC sections. BUT…I have a huge problem with that essay…I cant think of good examples and my writing is…lets say…has room for improvement :-)</p>
<p>I will post an essay I just wrote:</p>
<p>Assignment:
Is it true that acting quickly and instinctively is the best response to a crisis? Or are there times when an urgent situation requires a more careful consideration and a slower response? Plan your response…</p>
<p>Nowadays people do rather rely on their brain and deliberate thinking than on their consciesness and instincts. Spontaneousness is still an appreciated ability, but when it comes down to difficult situations or crisises, a man of action is not what most people want to handle this. They forgot that instincts once have been the only thing man could rely on in hazardous predicaments. Instincts would have been eradicated by evolution if they were that useless. </p>
<p>When my friends and I once returned to my car after a party in midtown of my hometown, a bunch of suspicious people started talking to us and ask for a cellphone to call somebody. Those guys were really drunk and a kind of voice within told me that something is definetly wrong with them. As a friend of mine handed out his cellphone because he wanted to be helpful, one of them grabbed it and tried to run away with it. Not deliberately I wrapped my arms around him, like I learned it in my football practice before, stopped him and demanded the cellphone. I could have thought about the consequences first, that those guys may get angry and try to purloin more than our cellphones, but they did not expect me to do an action of temerity and were so confounded, that we got the cellphone back and could run away. </p>
<p>Another proof that an inadvertent action might be better than pondering which takes too much time is the story of a German soldier who fought against the Russians in a skirmish in second world war. Peter Kaufmann became a hero for his company because he obeyed a stupidly given order from his leutienant to rescue two of his friends who got into a seriously dangerous situation. He did not think about the upcoming chastises, but handled the situation spontaneous which saved the two peoples life. Peter Kaufmann were put in jail because the government suspected him of perfidy, but after scrutinizing his case the government showed its adulation to him by announcing him an official war hero.</p>
<p>And how risky would be any public appearance for the president , if his bodyguards did not react instantly in a dangerous situation? They are trained to leave all thoughts behind and give even their lifes to guard the president.
The conclusion is, that if you have not got the time to deliberate, there are still your inherited instincts that automatically make the right decision, so trust them.</p>
<p>hOW to ace the writing section </p>
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<p>Do an intro, MAKE UP 3 examples, do a conclusion.</p>
<p>Example: Topic= Is freedom always the best for everyone.</p>
<p>Intro- use up space repeating the question, say no</p>
<p>ex 1- My sister at Brown was given too much freedom and she felt stressed out because she didn’t know what classes to take because of the open curriculum</p>
<p>ex 2-In the book Jacky Brown, a girl Jacky Brown likes being a servant because she feels being in the real world and having to make her own choices is too much pressure</p>
<p>ex 3- My brother was forced to take science class, which he wouldn’t have done on his own (he wanted to do football instead), but he ended up loving it and discovering a cure for a deadly disease that saved many lives.</p>
<p>conclusion- restate your examples.</p>
<p>EASY HUH? DIDN’T THAT HELP?</p>
<p>remember, MAKE UP EXAMPLES FROM PERSONAL EXPERIENCE!!! Did that help?</p>
<p>ok, that is the third time I read this post…did you break your keyboard and the only buttons left are Ctrl, C and V ?</p>
<p>Well, you must be deaf because I pasted that 3 times and you still didn’t see it, and this is the best advice you can get.</p>
<p>Make up stuff and use up space.</p>
<p>I don’t have much to add but sometimes if I can’t think of anything I take the opposite of a situation- what COULD have happened.</p>
<p>For example, with the thugs and cell phone incident, you could say that it’s better NOT to act quickly, because you could have been seriously injured as it’s better to run away and not worry about material posessions and focus on keeping yourself safe. Of course, you could stick with what actually happened and argue that it’s better to act first- but there may be a time when you need another example and need to switch it up a bit.</p>
<p>Good Luck!</p>
<p>“Well, you must be deaf because I pasted that 3 times and you still didn’t see it, and this is the best advice you can get”</p>
<p>Deaf? Ummmm…do you mind blind? No that doesn’t make any sense either.</p>
<p>Okay, four times, seriously?</p>
<p>ALWAYS FOLLOW THIS FORMAT.
-Short Intro, with a clear and concise thesis statement
-1st Body Paragraph that begins with a strong topic sentence
-2nd Body Paragraph that begins with a strong topic sentence that moves the essay from the 1st body paragraph to the 2nd
-3rd Body Paragraph that begins with a strong topic sentence that moves the essay from the 1st body paragraph to the 2nd
-Conclusion: If you are a good writer tie up the essay, if you aren’t restate the thesis
Advice:
-For the first and second body paragraphs have one example from history and another from literature.
-Throw in one or two big words.
-Personal example can work in the third body paragraph (making up a personal to fit the topic)
-Make an Outline of your essay before you write
I am not a great writer, and I got a 10 on the essay using this formula. Good luck.</p>
<p>Edit:
-Use quintessential once during your essay. It always fits.</p>
<p>You want a max. of one personal examples.</p>