Essay Snippets (Need Help Correcting Them)

<p>So, despite getting an 800 in writing on the SAT, I am actually horrible with grammar. I kept moving as a child and have many gaps in my learning. Therefore, I am hoping someone would be kind enough to confirm that these sentences are grammatically correct.</p>

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<li><p>“Why are you eating the pizza?” This is never mentioned at my household.</p></li>
<li><p>At noon, I was eating my pizza, when my dog exclaimed, “What are you eating?”</p></li>
<li><p>I concluded: “Why was my dog hungry?”<br>
I concluded, “Why was my dog hungry?” </p></li>
<li><p>So, though winning the contest, I had lost my dog.
So though winning the contest, I had lost my dog.</p></li>
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