<p>What is Exeter looking for in its essays? I wrote one about (something I am passionate about) and the other one is an essay about Israel (something that is important to me.) Do you think I should change the Israel one to be more personal? It is a good essay, and reflects my love for Israel (which is a big part of me) but the essay itself doesn’t talk about me.</p>
<p>You could probably change it in a way so you show how your love of Israel is an important part of who you are, but you have to be very careful not to seem bias against other beliefs or religio-centric in any way.</p>
<p>Or you could write about how Israel relates to you, and how Israel came to play a big role in your life. Just write about yourself in the sense of how you consider yourself a true Israeli.</p>
<p>Yeah, I agree with what everyone said. Just tell why it pertains so much to you, and what that will bring to Exeter without actually stating it. You want to show your uniqueness.</p>