Feedback for Finical Aid Appeal Letter

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Dear Financial Aid Appeals Committee,

My name is ______, and my student I.D. number is xxxxxxxxx. I am writing this letter of appeal to ask for the reconsideration of my current financial aid suspension due to my lack of meeting the SAP requirements. I became deficient because I experienced heavy mental stain during my spring semester due to unhanded stress from my current job and my on-going search to find a new one. I worked 40 hours each pay period. This has caused me to mentally withdraw from my studies. I am aware that my inability to deal with my stress properly and non-acknowledgement to seeking help for it has caused my grades to dramatically decline. I take full responsibility in the neglect of my studies and am determined to bring my GPA of 1.966 up to the required SAP standards with only 18 more credits left until my Business Administration degree is complete. I am confident that the following steps will insure great improvement in my academic satisfactory.

In solution to lessen my stress I have done the following:
• Cut my work hours by ten
• Talk to an academic adviser about the classes I have to take to complete my Associates Degree of Business Administration.
• Talk to an academic adviser about the classes I must retake due to academic unsatisfactory.
• I have admitted to my stress situation by talking to my support system for emotional management
• Signed up for a lesser course load a semester to insure that I am taking my time so that I am not overwhelmed.

In a solution to stop future academic stress I have planned to do the following:
• Keep meeting with my academic adviser until I am ready to graduate.
• Keep track of my academic plan.

Sincerely,


Enclosed Documents: A copy of my pay stub period of 40 hours, Copy of pay stub with recently cut hours, and a copy of my advised enrollment form from speaking with a academic adviser.

This is probably due by the end of the day tomorrow? The content/reasoning seems OK. Define the pay period (2 weeks?). I would suggest you visit the counseling center and look for an on-campus job. State the threshold requirement (…required SAP standards of 2.0 cumulative GPA…).

The english usage needs correcting throughout (and there are a couple of typos as well “…mental stain…” “…unhanded stress…”). Mostly poor choice of word and awkward word usage. Someone at the writing center could help you fix this in 15 minutes.

What is a “support system for emotional management”? Mother? Boyfriend? Bottle of whiskey? Why let them guess- let them know who is supporting you. You may also want to go to the student health center. These stressors will follow you throughout your life. Now is the time to learn coping strategies.

It is not due by the end of tomorrow. Just min stress from my current job not enough to drink but enough to distract me from school. I want them to know that that was a short term mini stress problem and that I have it under control now. Thank you for your feedback @itsJustSchool

Re read your letter. Take out all the redundant information. You only have to say something ONCE. You do not need to reword the same issue several times. Fix your grammar mistakes. There are a lot of them.

Lol thank you for your feedback. @thumper1