Feedback for my Carnegie Mellon University essay?

<p>We'll I'm pretty much done writing my "Why CMU" essay.
Any feedback/comments/suggestions would be greatly appreciated!</p>

<p>send it to me :)</p>

<p>PM me. I can try and offer some feedback.</p>

<p>PM me, i'll give you my feedback, I'm applying to carnegie mellon to maybe you can read mine when I'm done</p>

<p>Yeah, you can send it my way. :)</p>

<p>PM me if you like. I applied EDII for CMU so I written my essay a month ago</p>

<p>Sent it to you guys. Anyone else?</p>

<p>Send it over, i luv givin feedback</p>