feedback on my princeton essays?(I wrote about spongebob)

The application is due nov. 1 and I know my essays need some work to be competitive at the Ivy level.

I heard you want to paint a “complete package” and fill a niche, so I kind of went for an “optimistic classmate” theme.

Ideally, someone knowledgeable. However, anyone with advice whatsoever, feel free to contact me!