Financial Aid Appeal Letter help

To give a little back ground of myself, I currently am a senior undergraduate but have had a rough past two year resulting my financial aid suspension. Any help whether it’s of the information or any grammatical error would be tremendous. The letter isn’t the complete letter, the intro and conclusion have been taken out, but what I wanted others or the financial aid faculty to get out of it is that I messed up and I blame no one else but me and these are the steps I’m making to fix it.

I think it’s best if I put just pure facts, so here it is.

Sample:

The issue of regular attendance first arose during spring 2014. The struggle of attending class would ultimately lead me to dropping all of the classes as of far. My lack of regular attendance was sourced by two things: An ongoing issue with my family (due to the occurrence of stroke of my grandmother) and my stubbornness. Stubbornness because I never ask help whether it is from my professors, my friends, or my family. The continuous absence would lead me to having anxiety and anxiety attacks. The problem only grew, as I made no attempt for improvement. Fall 2015, was the tipping point, where I let myself develop an aggressive gambling habit. In result, my attendance came to the point where I would only attend the exam dates. This only grew during my spring semester, where I made no attempts of showing up to most of my classes and in result finally brought my standing to unsatisfactory.

My family has learned of my mistakes and my problems, to which our trust has been severed. With the growing issues, I’ve taken a step to no longer continue these problems. I’ve had therapy to assist with my anxiety and my gambling addiction. I have become an avid user of online helping sites as well, to which I have built a small community where we share our problems and our attempts on a daily basis. Being open about the problems I’m currently facing and having the support of my family has helped immensely of my anxiety and also in result, I have not gambled once throughout the past three months. How I plan to improve more is to build a community of help at my school. Start making positive relations with my Advisor, my professors, classmates, and my councilor. Attendance is of my biggest issue, to which I have also changed my sleeping schedule and have started working more during the summer to improve my time management.

I would shorten it even more especially the part on how you messed up.

Just mention the steps you have taken so far to change things.

I don’t know if your FA can be reinstated at this point because for federal aid you have to meet SAP. Minimum GPA and also a certain percentage of completed credits.

Did you talk to FA office to see how many credits you need and what it would take for you to meet SAP?

You might have to take a leave of absence and work to save up money to finish school or take some community college classes to meet SAP.

But you should discuss your unique situation with someone at your school to find out how best to proceed.

Please have someone help you who speaks standard American English. Your letter has a number of very awkward sentences in it. the language you use needs to be clear to the folks reading it.

Example: “My lack of attendance was sourced by two things.”

Most folks would say…my lack of attendance was caused by tw things.

I’m not sure writing about your 2014 experiences is going to help you. I would think this committee would want to hear current events. You need to include what happened, but briefly. They already know you failed. Don’t put in excuses. Then put in what you have already done to address your issues. Finally put what you will do to continue to I orove your grades in college.

And lastly, my opinion, you need to address your attndance issues head on. This seems to be a chronic issue that has affected your grades for several years. Until you get the reasons resolved, there is no point in retuning to school.