*-*!First Essay Ever!*-*

College Essays
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<p>Hey everyone this is my first essay ever, and I, by no means, plan on using it as my final college essay. I just need to know what is wrong with it and how I can improve? Please I’m relying solely on CC to solve this essay problem for me, and I promise if you give me input (I know there’s tons of issues) I will read your essay and even though I can’t correct it’s general look, I can help with spelling, grammar, and writing style. </p>

<p>I would appreciate ALL help in this matter!!!</p>

<p>thanks</p>

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<p>send it over, I’ll take a look.</p>

3

<p>By being so formal, you distance yourself from the audience. (The start was more appropriate though)</p>

4

<p>send it over to me. <a href="mailto:yofatcat1■■■■■■.com">yofatcat1■■■■■■.com</a></p>

5

<p>PM me. I’ll read it.</p>

6

<p>i’ll read it. Im pretty broed, i need somethuing to do</p>

7

<p>PM me. I’ll read it.</p>

8

<p>pm ill try my best</p>

9

<p>I can look over it</p>