<p>I am applying as a transfer to some ivies for next fall that said I have decided to personalized each “why transfer essay” fitting every college. But the image that I will be portraying will be pertained in every aspect of my application.
Image: The Encouraging Leader.
After taking a some what lengthy personality test that was the type of person that I was. When I showed the result to my AP Psychology teacher here answer was “well thats not a surprise.” Although I had yet to lead any project.
So how will I be portraying that in my essay?
I am going to assume that most of you are aware of a book titled “the stranger” by Albert Camus, and his main personage Meursault. I will basically be juxtaposing my personality to his with a few exceptions. I will add facts like how it might be because I am part Algerian, and how my parents could be see as hero because of what they had done. And how I was called a stranger in a country that i had lived for 7 years. Since Meursault used his talent to become a absurd hero, I in return will do the same but a different kind of hero
My parents’ work will lead me to develop my interest on how developed an interest toward science and the health field.
Some college make reference to what you have in mind after graduation, mine of course would be going to med school but after that , the story of the Encouraging hero. All though it is still under major construction my plan is to while proving health care in under developed countries i would teach middle to high school children how to think differently.
Please comment on which part i should really elaborate on.</p>
<p>I think you should discuss what you HAVE done and how that changed your life instead of dreaming become a doctor and went on to serve under developed countries. Everyone can write a dream, few can achieve. Just for your reference, only about 20% of “pre-med” track college freshman ended applying for med school after 4 years and the adcoms in Ivies are more than aware of that.</p>
<p>what do you mean buy what i have done? I have actually done shadowing with a neurosurgeon and i plan on doing another soon. I am applying to 3 medical programs this summer.</p>
<p>You’ve posted some other threads with rather lofty ideas for admissions essays. I think you’re trying to get too creative, which is causing you to drift away from the point of an admissions essay. Painting a dramatic picture of how you came from a ‘zero to a hero’ isn’t likely to help you in admissions. You obviously want to touch on how your specific interests developed to some degree, but it sounds like you’re going to attempt to sum up your life story. That’s not what you want to do in a college essay. You want to talk about what you, specifically, have done to accomplish your goals thus far, how/why you would continue to develop these goals at their school, and why they should give you the opportunity to do it -at- their school. Shadowing with a neurosurgeon? That’s a wonderful experience to talk about on your application. How you were called a stranger in a country that you had lived for 7 years? Not so relevant. </p>
<p>I get that you’re trying to craft a unique and memorable essay, but painting a ‘zero to hero’ picture is not really as unique as you might think it is, and it’s honestly not all that relevant to the things that an admissions board is likely to be looking for. </p>
<p>"…but after that , the story of the Encouraging hero. All though it is still under major construction my plan is to while proving health care in under developed countries i would teach middle to high school children how to think differently."</p>
<p>This just sounds amazingly overdone. The story of the “encouraging hero?” That sounds somehow preemptively pretentious and conceited. Do as you’d like, but I would very strongly suggest dialing this back a bit. </p>
<p>This essay is not what i was planning to write for my “why transfer essay”. That was what I was planning of writing for “a postgraduate essay”. Beside that do you my main image “the encouraging leader” can pass as something out of the common.</p>
<p>lol, you are putting horse before carriage. Think “why transfer” and two, three years later you can talk about post graduate.</p>
<p>They are actually asking for one. I cant base my answer to “if i transfer to your school…” What I am mentioned as a dream is a result of a deep understanding of what i could accomplish with the help of my transferring college.</p>