GMAT Practice

Colleges & Universities Columbia University
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<p>I got this test question from 800score.com and they charge $20 for grading, so can somebody please give me their free guestimate. This is my first time practicing, so any resposne would be greatly appreciated.</p>

<p>“The desire of corporations to maximize profits creates conflict with the general welfare of the nation at large”</p>

<p>I disagree that the desire of corporations to maximize profits creates conflict with the general welfare of the nation at large. Maximizing profits will eventually lead to full employment which is defined as less than 5% unemployment. If the corporation maximizes their profits then that means that they are most likely going to be working with domestic companies and international companies which helps the global market as well as global relations. So in essence, the greater rate of trade may lead to peace amongst nations which in turn protects the general welfare of a nation. When I was recently watching the news, I learned that Israel’s third leading trade partner is Germany. One might ask themselves, “well why is that significant?” In the 1940’s the Nazi’s of present day Germany were putting the Jews through Genocide. The Jews were eventually granted the nation of Israel from the United States because of this atrocious act. I believe that the significant amount of trade that goes on between these nations eases any uneasiness between these two nations. So German and Israeli companies working together is a prime example of how major corporations maximizing their profits can truly benefit the welfare of the nation(s) at large. </p>

<p>Major corporations maximizing their profits benefits the welfare of a nation at large in so many ways. The reasons include greater employment, a stronger national market, patriotism, satisfied citizens, and all of this will create a tremendouse opportunities for the future of the nation(s). For example if there are more jobs that means that the average household income’s go up which in turn leads to more of the children in those households or students achieveing their college degree. More students with college degrees will benefit the nation as well as the families of the graduates. A college degree is the best investment that money can buy.</p>

<p>I am personally an investment banker and via my business we are loaning companies more money to spend on their exising businesses as well as cash to finance their start ups. Upon a succseful deal, there is a great chain reaction which spurs patriotism, creates jobs, satisifies our clients, and these are just a few of the perks. In a book that I am reading, “the 12 Rules of Great Managing,” the author advises all business people to, “Break all of the rules.” I agree with this because when you are willing to break certain rules, you do something that has never been done, you create something new, and it creates great synergies. So if this statement, states that “The desire of corporations to maximize profits creates conflict with the general welfare of the nation at large,” I say MAXIMIZE PROFITS.</p>

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<p>Why are you spamming this? If this is truly your writing, it’s disorganized and flows poorly. There is no roadmap. You don’t use topic sentences. You shift gears to totally different ideas in the middle of paragraphs. In sum, it’s slightly easier to follow than some dumb celeb’s twitter rant.</p>

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<p>LOL, alright you could have just said, that it is disorganized and it flows poorly. Also, why do you care that I want the opinion of other students. It was my first time taking the practice, so now I can learn from your critique and make myself a better writer. I only had 30 minutes to do it, so I did not have time to edit. If I did, I would made the essay a lot better. I thought that my content was good.</p>

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<p>I gave you 3 specific reasons why it’s disorganized/flows poorly.</p>

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<p>No, it would have been a lot better if you had spent a few minutes at the beginning thinking about what you were going to say and planning out the structure of the essay before you started writing. It’s clear you just started writing whatever came to your brain given that it flows like verbal diarrhea. You don’t have time to do much editing in 30 minutes and this disorganized mess would require significant time to edit; it needs to come out organized the first time.</p>

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<p>It doesn’t matter. It’s hard to figure out what you’re saying and where you’re going. And this isn’t exactly a topic where content really matters-- they’re not testing your knowledge of anything but to see if you can write coherently.</p>

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<p>Columbia2002,</p>

<p>Well I now have a few more tricks up my sleeve thanks to your responses. Now I understand that I need to:</p>

<p>Create a roadmap
Use topic sentences
I need to stop shifting gears in each paragraph
and I think the most important point was, that I need to outline prior to beginning the essay</p>

<p>THANK YOU</p>

<p>Best regards,</p>

<p>Jason Malki</p>

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<p>This essay is pretty terrible. If you pay me, I’ll teach you how to write an acceptable response.</p>

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<p>Karot,</p>

<p>How much for an example of a 6?</p>

<p>Thank you,</p>

<p>Jason Malki</p>

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<p>Check that, I found an example via Google,</p>

<p>"Prompt: When someone achieves greatness in any field—such as the arts, science, politics, or business—that person’s achievements are more important than any of his or her personal faults.</p>

<p>Student response: When individuals attain greatness, their achievements are more important than their personal faults. While historians should not whitewash the personal foibles of great individuals, the impact that these mortals have had in their fields should tower over any personality defects. To focus on the personal weaknesses of great individuals is to miss the importance of their achievements.</p>

<p>The course of human history is decorated with individuals able to rise above their peers and reach the zenith in their fields. These individuals are often the subject of intense scrutiny from contemporaneous skeptics and later historians. But no one can lead an exemplary private life all the time; no human being is able to withstand such surveillance and historical scrutiny without personal faults coming to light. Great individuals are no exception. However, it is misguided to focus on their personal faults rather than their achievements. To do so is to miss the importance of their work, without which our culture would be worse off.</p>

<p>For example, Abraham Lincoln was arguably one of the greatest Presidents the United States has ever had. He managed to bring the country through a substantial revolution and to end slavery despite powerful economic and social forces working against him day and night. However, Lincoln was not a saint. He was moody and prone to depressive funks that disrupted his family life and slowly eroded his marriage. These personal faults did not reduce his success as a President. While we do not have to ignore questions about whether he was a depressive, we also should not consider them an important part of his political heritage. In contrast, many people criticize Lincoln’s decision to suspend the right of habeas corpus. This (presumed) failing is not personal in nature, but relates directly to Lincoln’s work in his field. Criticisms of this sort are entirely relevant, whereas personal criticisms are not.</p>

<p>Another example of a great individual dogged by criticism of his personal conduct is Albert Einstein. Einstein developed a number of the most important theories in modern physics, including an explanation of the photoelectric effect, an explanation of Brownian motion, special and general relativity, and Bose-Einstein quantum statistics. Each one of these theories would have been considered a great life’s work for a scientist; for one man to contribute this much is remarkable. However, Einstein also had life-long problems with infidelity. The fact that he cheated on his wife is in no way relevant to his accomplishments in the field of physics, and indeed most references to Einstein properly ignore it. To focus attention on the faults of his personal life is to obscure the impact he made on history.</p>

<p>Great individuals have personal faults, as all human beings do. Yet it is incorrect to assert that these faults detract from those individuals’ accomplishments. We are better able to appreciate the gravity of great accomplishments when we are not burying our heads in the sand, in search of personal failings."</p>