<p>I plan to write my essay on my social experiences as a techno DJ. Basically the events of one typical set and what needs to be done- micromanaging everything, keeping everything running smoothly between songs and so on, and then apply that to life and academics.</p>
<p>Is that interesting enough, too stupid?</p>
<p>I’m not so sure about the “apply that to life and academics” part.</p>
<p>Maybe this is not what you have in mind. But, be aware that your essay doesn’t have to draw conclusions about life or academics. It should rather simply show some positive and interesting things about you. Which your idea seems to do. </p>
<p>I’ve read a lot of those endings “about life”. Generally, they are not imo as personal, detailed, and revealing as the rest of the essay. On the contrary, they tend to be vague and general. They tend to “tell” rather than “show”.</p>
<p>It sounds like you have a good way to show things about yourself. Maybe more general comments “about life” will work out but, if not, imo don’t force them.</p>
<p>For some good advice about “showing” versus “telling” in college essays, see:</p>
<p><a href=“http://www.virginia.edu/undergradadmission/writingtheessay.html[/url]”>http://www.virginia.edu/undergradadmission/writingtheessay.html</a></p>
<p>^ADad said everything that I wanted to say. I hate when in personal essays (not just application ones) people add trite paragraphs to the end of the essay to explain how their actions in the beginning represent their outlook on life/personality/etc.: “As I replaced the ice cream carton within the freezer, I realized that life is just like scooping ice cream!!!” I feel as if a similar paragraph in your essay would come off as cliched and ruin what seems like an otherwise unique essay.
Perhaps, you could describe one particular event that demonstrates your character, love for DJing/music, aaaand… other good stuff. Try not to actually come out and explain how certain experiences represent your philosophy on life… let the experiences speak for themselves!!!</p>
<p>What would be totally cool using your experiences would be to make it an ongoing metaphor in a somewhat longer (but not, you know, <em>that</em> long) piece. </p>
<p>Introduce the atmosphere of a gig at night, the contrasting lighting and absorbing sound, the mode in which you think and feel during your gigs. Soon after, keep the same mood in your writing, atmosphere, vocab. etc. as you work the DJing into your life story.</p>
<p>If you blend the two, essay readers will come away feeling like they just left the most underground, intimate club possible…</p>
<p>But that’s just me dreaming lol.</p>
<p>The hardest part is- how should I make the transfer from talking about the DJing experience to life without sounding lame and cliche? “Mixing from one song to the next is like moving through stages of life.” is just not going to work.</p>
<p>Right. That’s why imo you don’t go there.</p>
<p>yeah i would end with an anecdote instead of spelling it out. tell exactly what you do to switch them(including some details that could be used describing changes in life subtly). use the essay to show how you change the song/life., don’t tell them how it’s similar.</p>
<p>Yeah, after some consideration- you guys are right. It probably is best to not address any life topics, or if so, definitely not overtly. The moment the essay takes that turn it will go from unique and somewhat cool, to just another toss in the pile from the Admissions officer.</p>
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Well said. :D</p>