Grade an essay here #6

<p>This one’s bad. (Weak examples, “abscond,” etc.)</p>

<p>“Do you think that ease does not challenge us and that we need adversity to help us discover who we are?”</p>

<p>Challenges await us in today’s world. Whether they’re biology tests or theater auditions, obstacles always lie ahead of us in our various journeys. Taking shortcuts to arrive at the destination is tempting, but this view actually harms us in the end. Difficult tasks, not easy shortcuts, allow us to experience personal growth and enlightenment.</p>

<p>Andrew Jackson was an exemplary figure of hardship’s positive impact. Growing up as a son of a poor farmer, Jackson became an orphan at an early age. After going through glacial foster families, Jackson enlisted in the army. The army was a true home for Jackson; he spent everyday of his life with fellow soldiers, fighting side by side during the Revolutionary War. Through teamwork, Jackson learned the importance of compassionate unity. He bowed to become a humble advocate of freedom, putting his fellow citizens at the top of his priority. His victorious presidential campaign in 1828 wouldn’t have succeeded if Jackson suffered no adversity during his childhood; he would’ve neglected the need of others and focused on his egotistical desire.</p>

<p>Moreover, Zora Neale Hurston’s “Their Eyes Were Watching God” showcases the significance of difficult struggle on moral development as well. Janie, the protagonist, grows up under strict aegis of her grandmother. Dying to ascond her grandmother’s view on life, Janie marries Logan, a barbaric farmer. What was supposed to be a blooming marriage became a debacle; Logan’s physical and verbal abuse left Janie lachrymose. In desperation, Janie runs off with Jodie, a successful businessman. Although Jodie’s enormous wealth and charming ambition attracted Janie at first, Jodie’s hectic lifestyle with work turned their relationship into power struggle. Janied tried her luck with another man, Tea Cake, when Jodie died of illness. Tea Cake treated Janie with respect, providing equal share of chore and freedom. When Tea Cake died of rabies, Janie no longer had to search for her identity. Tea Cake’s love had convinced her that she didn’t need artificial lust to be a strong, independent woman. Overcoming arduous obstacles, Janie had finally discovered self-confidence.</p>

<p>It is easy to be blinded by shortcuts in life. They take us faster to our goals conveniently without work. However, we cannot learn the value of enlightenment unless we overcome obstacles first. To discover ourselves, we must embrace challenges with consciousness.</p>

<p>Whoa i got the exact same prompt at my prep center</p>

<p>It’s test #7 in the blue book.</p>

<p>Someone?</p>