If any of you have a few minutes to spare, I’d really appreciate it if you could grade my practice essay (please say if it’s out of 6 or 12) and give me a bit of feedback for it. Thanks! Also, if you also have a practice essay that you want comments on, I’d be happy to grade yours in exchange.
Prompt: Should people take more responsibility for solving problems that affect their communities or the nation in general?
People who belong to a community or a nation should always take responsibility to solve problems that affect the said community or nation. If one is a member of a community or nation, then one must certainty take part in trying to resolve its problems, as it is the job of the members to be involved in order to enable the community or nation to thrive. As exemplified by Dr. Rieux’s actions in The Plague by Albert Camus and the actions of the Asian Culture Club in my school, individual members of larger organizations definitely should take initiative in solving problems that affect the whole community or nation.
In The Plague by Albert Camus, the town of Oran is unexpectedly struck by a deadly plague epidemic. At first, many town officials did not want to acknowledge that it was plague because they were afraid that announcing a plague epidemic would induce panic and fear among Oran’s inhabitants. However, a prominent doctor in Oran, Dr. Rieux, argued against that; he said that it is important to tell the public the truth and to put into effect a quarantine on the town as a prophylactic measure. After much discussion with other doctors, the town government listened to Dr. Rieux and announced a plague epidemic as well as a quarantine in Oran. Soon aftewars, the daily number of deaths started to rise dramatically as the contagious bacteria infected more and more citizens. Had Dr. Rieux not taken the initiative to confront the town officials regarding their treatment of the epidemic, the plague could have spread outside of the Oran; thus, by taking on the responsibility of expressing his concern for the public health, Dr. Rieux greatly helped both is own community and the entire outside world.
Similarly, in my school, there is a significant percentage of Asian students. However, although numerous Jewish and Christian holidays were recognized on the school calendar by giving students days off to celebrate, no Asian holidays were recognized. As a result, the prominent Asian Culture Club in my school took on the responsibility of making the cultural traditions and holidays of Asian students similarly respected by the school. The club’s president petitioned the school principal for a day off for students on Lunar New Year so that Asian students can celebrate this important holiday with their families without having to still go to school on that day and spend a significant portion of the holiday completing homework assignments. By presenting his case, backed by the signatures of numerous students, the president of the club was able to get Lunar New Year recognized as a holiday on the school calendar. Thus, as demonstrated by the Asian Culture Club president who fought for the representation of a culture’s holidays on the school calendar, it is important to take responsibility to solve problems in a community that one is a part of so that everyone can be represented and content with the way things are.