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<p>Prompt: Do closed doors make us creative?</p>

<p>Mankind thrives in the face of challenges. Since cavemen were around, obstacles have motivated humans to think outside the box. The statement that closed doors makes us creative is an unequivocal truth bolstered by several examples from literature and current entrepreneurs like Jay Gatsby from the Great Gatsby and a local business man Mr. Peterson.</p>

<p>Even examples in literature show that obstacles can be overcome by creativeness. Jay Gatsby, a poor farmer boy who lives a hard life, wants to become a rich and relaxed businessman. Gatsby faces a social system similar to the one in India where movement is nearly impossible. He is not deterred by this fact and resorts to bootlegging liquor as a creative way to generate income. This ultimately helps him become immensely wealthy and achieve his dream life. Thus, had the restriction of social class not been present, Gatsby might not have needed to resort to creative means to become rich, thereby making him a creative person.</p>

<p>Relevant to Gatsby’s business sense, creative problem solving is generously rewarded in the entrepreneurial world. Entrepreneurs pride themselves in using closed doors to their advantage by providing a solution, creating a company and reaping the profits. One example is Mr. Peterson who runs the local deli. After losing his job in the financial crisis, Mr. Peterson took what savings he had and invested them into a roadside deli. By offering creative products that appeal to people he attracts hundreds of loyal customers and never has had to face unemployment again. </p>

<p>Indeed after careful analysis closed doors are crucial to fostering creativity. From<br>
the Great Gatsby to a local business hero, developing a creative mindset is crucial in their success and overcoming their obstacles. For society as a whole, this creativity is beneficial in the face of adversity as it helps mankind progress. </p>

<p>bump?</p>

<p>I’m not in the position to score you, but I’d state that your 2nd and last paragraphs need a more smooth transition, instead of the more bland ones…</p>