Grade my essay! overrated vs underrated

<p>** is it better to be underrated by people than to be overrated by them?**</p>

<p>While no one wants to be underrated, being overrated is definitely worse. If we are depreciated there is always an opportunity to repair the others opinion. On the other hand, if people overestimate ones abilities and one let them down the outcome would be deleterious both for him and for others.</p>

<p>When something or somebody is overrated, much is being expected from them. Thus, when people or products do not meet the demands, they will suffer a magnified criticism. Disappointment often propels anger, which makes the reproach exaggerated or even unjustified. A good illustration could be the problem of highly acclaimed new music band. We can often hear about debuts in the entertainment industry, which seem to promise long-lasting celebrities. However in most of the cases, after recording few albums the bands disappear from the music scene. The public could be enraged even after one unfortunate concert. In such situations the media fuels the dissatisfaction, ending the carrier of the musicians.</p>

<p>Moreover, the disillusionment is detrimental to an overrated person as well. A perfect example could be any top student. In most of the cases such a student succeeds in most competitions and receives the highest grades in the class. However, if the student once fails in some of the standardize test, the results could be catastrophic. While used to success, the student might not cope with the failure that he ended with. Being overrated by teachers and parent also does not help him. The diminished pride and the feeling that he disappointed someone’s expectation could let to even a serious depression, and definitely to loss of confidence.</p>

<p>Contrastingly, if someone is underrated at the beginning, despite the fact that he or she might be discontent with the public opinion, this dissatisfaction can only motivate him or her to excel. Eventually, when such a person achieves success, others could be much more impressed than usually because they were taken totally by surprise. Furthermore, because a person has already overcome criticism he or she is immune to the public discontent. Opposed to those who are overrated, underrated people could only improve themselves and their image in the eyes of others. </p>

<p>In brief, being appreciated more than you deserve is worse than being underrated. While your abilities are overestimated, you could suffer mental problems when failing, but when your efforts are not admired enough you would only zealously seek the opportunity to improve. In other words, failing when you are underrated, you lose nothing, but when being overrated, everything. Moreover, when an highly acclaimed person succeeds, there is no special interest in that, but when a dark horse wins all eyes are directed towards him.</p>

<p>i give it a 7/8.</p>

<p>why? because you dont give concrete examples.
the essay seems a little redundant.</p>

<p>my teachers have taught us never to use “you” in the conclusion, it’s like attacking the reader.
but by no means take offense to it, its only my opinion</p>

<p>I agree with anhtimmy on this one. Concrete examples.</p>

<p>Yeah, more concrete examples. The readers are just looking for a standard high school essay: Intro, ex. 1 , ex. 2, ex.3 , conclusion.</p>

<p>I’d give it a 10 because of substantial grammatical errors that do not detract from meaning (they are quite conspicuous in the last sentence of the first paragraph, but there are approximately 15 in total), word choice (for example, “propel” and “discontent” are not the ideal terms in the context), tone (it is somewhat informal in the conclusion), logical inconsistencies (for example, the introductory sentence of the third paragraph contains the phrase “as well” despite the fact that overrated people were discussed in the previous paragraph), and less-than-stellar cohesiveness. Personally, I have no problem with the lack of concrete examples; it is a philosophical question for which reason and analytical thinking are required as opposed to the parroting of random examples. However, the graders at ETS might be looking for you to tell a woeful tale of how you were affected by people’s expectations of you.</p>

<p>thank all of you guys. that’s true that there are no specific exapmles, just general ones. In fact, I am not really used to this type of essays (not from US).</p>

<p>Begoner, special thanks for you. You mentioned a lot of things I must work on:). I’ll try to improve. Practice makes perfect:P</p>

<p>I’ll expand on my thinking. There’s nothing wrong with the tone. If anything, I find it excessively formal for me… I did an essay with a more informal tone than this that got an 11. Though I do like hypothetical examples, the readers do not have much time to read your essay. You’re better off doing a concrete example. </p>

<p>Exploring both sides is fantastic and will definitely help you. Just before you start writing, scribble down an example that goes with the idea of each paragraph. That way, you’re 100% go when you start writing. :)</p>