Grade my essay, please?

<p>Assignment: IS artistic inspiration more likely to be generated through solitude than through interaction with others?</p>

<p>How is art created? Sometimes we look at a famous painting or read a great book and ask ourselves this question. In interviews, artists say "I got this idea on a train" or "I was playing with my dog when this idea just struck me!". The point is, inspiration comes uninvited, to some people it comes in times of solitude, and to others it comes when they are with friends or total strangers.
J.K.Rowling, the world-known author of Harry Potter, said that Harry's whole life was just formed in her head while on a train to Manchester. She, then, started writing it in a cafe and by observing the people around her the characters were shaped even more clearly in her head. Also, Leonardo Da Vinci's "Mona Lisa" was said to be inspired by the woman he loved, most critics theorize that most of his paintings were inspired by someone or something.
In the movie "Girl with the Pearl Earring" the painter would imagine the painting in his head, and then he would get someone to pose for him, he always worked alone in his attic and slightest noise would make him stop and angry.
Every artist has his own way of seeking inspiration, some writers would give all their clothes to their assistant, lock the door and order their assistant not to give them their clothes until they slip 10 full pages under the door, some would simply read articles and books to seek inspiration. Other artists would go hiking or swimming or sing really loud in their car. Whatever the mean or the place is, inspiration will always be sought and hopefully, found.</p>

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<p>So, I always receive 8 on my essay and I decided to start preparing early for the essay once in my life. I was flipping through my book and found this assignment, the art-geek in me told me to choose this...it's not much, hopefully, you'll now know why I never practice my essay :D</p>

<p>Thanks in advance. :D</p>

<p>PS: I have very large hand-writing so this, as short as it seems, takes 1.5/1.7 pages. :D</p>

<p>It's a good start. I encourage you to rework it and expand it by a factor of 2. Don't worry so much about the "time" when you do this. Before you can write a "12" essay in 25 minutes, you need to be able to write a "12" essay.</p>

<p>The essay's major weakness is that it's not precisely on topic. Was you choice "interaction with others" or "solitude"? You appear to have chosen neither, deciding to write about the "origin" of the inspiration. I think that this is close enough to the thesis so that the graders will judge the thesis acceptable. But you're likely to lose points.</p>

<p>When I started to read your essay I thought that you chose "solitude". But then the J.K. Rawlings example suggests that "inspiration from others" was your point. This is also the case for your Mona Lisa example -- i.e it was inspired by the woman he loved. The second paragraph is more on topic. You make clear that solitude is important to some painters.</p>

<p>Your conclusion is too brief folding into one of your example paragraphs.</p>

<p>I do have that problem of not sticking to a single point, because i don't like generalization and every rule has it's exceptions. Not all writers choose solitude so I can't say that they ALL do, I say there are exceptions, give two examples supporting and one against and be done with it! I can't seem to kick this habit! is it OK? or will it keep my 8 score and not raise it?</p>

<p>Thank you for replying, and if you have anymore tips I'm more than willing to listen. :D</p>

<p>If you want to score a 12, then focus on one argument. A grader will not like if you jump back and forth between two viewpoints, as it seems that you could not find enough evidence to support only one side. Honestly, it is better to make up something that goes against your viewpoints, but is easier to write about, than something that you agree with, but may seem contradictory.</p>