Grade my essay please?

<p>I'm the first child in my family to go to a school in the U.S. so I don't really have a lot of people to ask advice for on stuff like essays except for teachers</p>

<p>If anyone is willing to read my essay I would really appreciate it :)</p>

<p>I'll send it through PM</p>

<p>Sure. I've read a few, and I like commenting.</p>

<p>Hey I can help pm it to me</p>

<p>I'm here also. Not sure if I can give you thorough feedback but I'll try</p>