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<p>Hey guys Can you help me figure out what the sat graders will most likely give me for the details essay I wrote yesterday? Thanks.</p>

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<pre><code> What sets the normal people apart from the extraordinary people in history? The answer is very simple, the paying of attention to details. The use of Details is extremely important to clearly convey what one has to say. The most celebrated and famous people in history are those who used specific details in their area of work, not those who vaguely outlined. These people include the likes of Shakespeare,Isaac Newton, and Thomas Jefferson.

Shakespeare is widely known to be the most prominent playwright in history. His plays are unparalleled and still taught in schools worldwide. This can be attributed to the amount of work he put into making his plays;it is said that he spent over 2 years crafting “Hamlet.” Shakespeare was a perfectionist and he paid close attention to even the most minor details. “Romeo and Juliet” for example is so intricately detailed that the reader feels as if he is experiencing the events in first person.

Isaac Newton was a man of many talents. He was a scientist, mathematician, and inventor. Astonishingly he was widely successful in all three of these fields. This is because Newton also was a champion of details. It took him forever to formulate his three laws of motion because he needed to make sure everything was proper and correct, for if it was not, the results would have been disastrous. Newton created almost 1000 Notations and symbols to be used in “Calculus” as he felt the need to have a distinct notation for every small detail/variation(definite integral vs non definite integral).
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<p>Lastly, Thomas Jefferson was perhaps the biggest perfectionist of the three stated above. Jefferson was a scholar who believed in conveying your message to another as clearly as possible. This reflected in the Declaration of Independence, which is said to have taken him almost 1 year to draft with over 500 edits done. </p>

<p>As can see paying attention to detail is not a disadvantage at all, rather it can be considered an advantage. People who do not pay attention to detail runt he risk of not communicating their message across clearly. The addition of detail gives depth and perception to a piece of work while Vague outlines do not. What would have happened if Newton had stated the acceleration of gravity to be “roughly 9-12 m/s” instead of 9.8 m/s or? Our airplanes and rockets would most likely not work as well as they do today. Would Great Britain have taken the colonists cries for independence seriously if Thomas Jefferson has paraphrased in the Declaration of Independence? The answer is no</p>

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<p>I know some of the statistics are made up but I don’t expect the sat reader to grade based on their accuracy or have the time to check them. I just wrote from memory so my real ones probably different but I just want a general idea.</p>

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<p>Bumpppppppppp</p>

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<p>Not to be all negative, but I think the best value you can find in posting your essay is criticism of your writing. If you just want someone to say, “wow, great job! 12/12 for sure!” then skip this post – it may offend you. </p>

<p>You have to ask yourself if every sentence has something to do with the prompt. Some background info is obviously necessary, but you have to cut to the chase quickly and really discuss the specifics of WHY details are important. and SHOW don’t TELL.</p>

<p>Paragraph 1: TS is vague obvious statement that does not relate to thesis (also, thesis is lacking). Next sentence is unnecessary and off-topic, nothing to do with details and is not necessary background info needed for understanding what follows. Good evidence by using Hamlet example. Focus on Hamlet, don’t have your conclusion sentence also intro Romeo and Juliet. </p>

<p>Paragraph 2: TS even more vague and obvious than before and unrelated. Next two sentences unnecessary background info. Great examples of details. No conclusion sentence?</p>

<p>Paragraph 3: Better TS. Horrible second sentence, unrelated. Good specific detail. No conclusion sentence?</p>

<p>Intro/Concl: very good intro, except need thesis in final sentence. Conclusion should restate your argument. You bring up a new argument of the consequences of what happens when you DONT pay attention to details – no body paragraph discusses these ramifications. Speculation all over the place is bad/broad hypotheticals are worse – especially when you pick 3 people everyone and their mother knows. No conclusion sentence…</p>

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<p>To answer your question, what grade I slap on this (see this for rationale: <a href=“http://info.gcsu.edu/intranet/univ_senate/Feb_23_04/Feb_04/newsat_scoring.pdf[/url]”>http://info.gcsu.edu/intranet/univ_senate/Feb_23_04/Feb_04/newsat_scoring.pdf&lt;/a&gt;) </p>

<p>I would give it 4/6 as one grader. This description fits most accurately:
An essay in this category is competent,
demonstrating adequate mastery, although it
will have lapses in quality.</p>

<p>But I am not an SAT grader so it may differ from what I would give it ( an 8/12 overall is my grade)</p>

<p>I’d say these are your changes for each grade:
12/12 - 7.5%
11/12 - 7.5%
10/12 - 15%
9/12 - 20%
8/12 - 25%
7/12 - 20%
6/12 - 5%</p>

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<p>Yeah I totally understand I like honesty when it involves a learning experience so thanks for being blatant.</p>