<p>In considering the question of weather one should try the new and unfamiliar, many people assume that one should adhere to what is familiar and mundane.Hence,such people would call a person who believes otherwise a “Maverick”.Well,I am a maverick.I believe that trying what is novel and unfamiliar has resulted in groundbreaking discoveries and break throughs.Numerous examples from history corroborates this view point.
A typical example of a person who tried the new and unfamiliar is the female activist Rosa parks.During the 1900s,segregation was very common and mundane that most African Americans adopted it as a permanent situation.However, Rosa parks was the first to try the unfamiliar by saying “No” to the bus driver when he demanded that she give her seat for a white man.She was accused of violating the laws of segregation in Montgomery and arrested for some time.Nonetheless,She was able to permanently end bus segregation in Montgomery.Only by trying what is novel was she able to play an active role in ending segregation.
Likewise,the french Scientist Louis Pasteur was able to correct a prevailing misconception by trying what is new and unfamiliar.During his time,most people believed that living things were spontaneously generated from nonliving Things.During this time,any one who tried to debunk this conception was severely undermined.Yet,through experimentation,observation,and trying what is new,Pasteur was able to support,with evidence,the idea that living things were generated by other living things,not from the rotten broth as many people assumed.Had he not examined what is new and unfamiliar,he wouldn’t have been able to come to this ground breaking discovery.
Another example that fosters my view point is the former USA president Lydon B Johnson.During his time,segregation was so common that no one had the motive to end the cruelty and inhumanity of segregation.Nevertheless,Johnson was the first to challenge segregation when he passed the Figurative act in 1964.Unfortunately,by implementing this act,Johnson was brutally condemned by strong senates who refused the idea of equality.Johnson,however,refused to budge.As a result,by trying what is new and unfamiliar,Johnson was able to end the cruelty and inhumanity of segregation.
After Careful analysis of Parks,Pasteur,and Johnson,one can see that trying what is new and familiar is,indeed,the way to discovery and success.</p>
<p>10/12: Make sure that at least your first sentence has no grammatical errors: “weather” instead of whether.</p>
<p>I’ll just pick at a few things and leave the rest for others.</p>
<p>The first thing I noticed was the misuse of the word “weather.” It’s “whether” make sure you check this while you write! As I read on I noticed more sentence and spelling errors. </p>
<p>Also, you overuse the words novel and unfamiliar. Try to find synonyms so the writing remains fresh and flowing. Another overused term you incorporated = “was able”</p>
<p>Your first sentence is… off. You start the sentence with “new and familiar” and end it with “familiar and mundane.” When your focus of the essay lies within the former, it is important not to emphasize the latter. Think of an although statement… “Although Icelandic citizens believe in elves, the lack of physical proof degrades the argument to mere myth.” With this type of sentence structure, you set a clear thesis. Ultimately, your opening sentence left me believing you were in support of the familiar and mundane.</p>
<p>Thanks owlehn,but your last point in dont concur with you. I said at the first sentenve "The new and UNfamiliar.then i mentioned the opposite pint of view,which is the Mundane and familiar.</p>
<p>Sorry, I meant to type unfamiliar at first. Now I’m going about confusing myself! 
Anyways, I just think it was weird that you put the attention on people who believe in the mundane and familiar at first and then switched the essay around to focus on the unfamiliar. </p>
<p>Maybe instead of writing:
Many people adhere to the familiar and mundane. They call those who don’t mavericks. I am a maverick. I think trying what is unfamiliar can be groundbreaking.</p>
<p>…you can try:
Few people often venture towards the unfamiliar. They are known as mavericks. This type of mentality can be groundbreaking.</p>
<p>I think you should also try to keep the entire essay in one grammatical person, such as third person. You use first person in the introduction then abandon it for the rest of the essay. I think it would have been better if you never used first person.</p>
<p>This is just my opinion.</p>