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<p>Prompt: WHat motivates people to change?</p>

<p>The Novel of Mice and Men by John Steinbeck portrays two charaters, lenny and George. Lenny is a mentally ill man who depends on George for safety and life. George is a irascible man who cares for lenny due to lenny’s lack of sense to survive. Often People are motivated to change when an object or person inhibits them to succeed. Continuously moving due to Lenny’s mistakes, George becomes motivated to change. </p>

<p>Throughout the story George and lenny are continuously moving. ONe incident Lenny takes a hold of a women and vehemently shakes her. George finds lenny in time and they flea before the towns people can pursue. As george and lenny travel to different towns, they dream of a life of peace. They dream of owning a farm and never having to move. George contemplates this dream but knows it is never possible because of lenny. </p>

<p>George analyzing the situation knows he will can never succeed and is motivated to change. George and Lenny arrive at a small village where they find a job. As soon as they settle down Lenny destroys their peace and causes mayhem. Lenny being mentally ill is attracted to colorful objects. Again he grabs the blouse of a women and she screams in agony. Lenny is frightened and grabs the women and begins to shake her telling to keep quiet. through his violent procedures the women dies and lenny fleas. George and the other workers search for lenny. George finds lenny and shoots him in the head. Through this example it signifies change. George knows he can never succeed and never grow when lenny is by his side. </p>

<p>lenny was the obstacle that inhibits george from succeeding. With the motivation to succeed he changed and started his new life without lenny. Often people are inhibited by obstacles; however they are motivated to change by the desire to succeed.</p>

<p>You should state your thesis at the very beginning of your essay. It would be easier for the readers to understand your view. Also, I would suggest picking more examples.</p>