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<p>Should people respect and tolerate everyone’s opinions, or should people take a stand against opinions they consider to be wrong? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.
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<p>I believe I speak for everyone when I stress on the importance of opinions. Opinions are like perspectives; they can lead to both minor and significant actions, which could be pretty harmless or very dangerous. Out of respect, people should feel the need to correct wrong opinions. If everyone thought toleration of any opinion is righteous, history would be very different.
According to sociology, changing materialistic items such as public transportation is much easier than changing the non materialistic, such as opinions or faith. If great people such as Martin Luther King hadn’t taken up the struggle of changing people’s opinions, segregation of blacks would still exist today. Despite the constant preaching and speeches, it actually took hundreds of thousands of people to make that necessary change and I am certain it was worth every single battle.
Another example would be the civil war of Rwanda, despite the genocide and horrific events between the Hutus and the Tutsis, the united states refused to intervene, until a certain man named Paul, who was risking his life to save as much hutus as he can, despite being a Tutsi himself, urged all his refugees to call ever American they knew and persuade them to help change opinions of interferences. Eventually the United Nations rescued millions of citizens and brought them to safety, all because of an opinion drift.
I think I have said enough to support my statement, there is nothing more dangerous than leaving a wrong opinion be, trying to correct one is a good deed and one should be very grateful with that sort of insight. For without great people like Martin Luther King or Paul, racism would be more common than it is today. Replicating these heroes will only lead to the abolishment of racism once and for all.</p>

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<p>Start by removing from this essay all references to yourself (“I”).</p>

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<p>I’d give this a 9.
In my opinion, your examples were perfect to support the topic but they were not fully developed.
However , I don’t see anything wrong in using “I”. I have read in several books that there’s nothing wrong with using “I”. But you should use clearer statements, more vocabulary, and more transitions to make a better flow.
I really liked your essay anyhow! :slight_smile:
I hope that would be helpful. </p>