Grade My Essay

<p>Hi, you guys.</p>

<p>There may be some things I wrote down on my example that may be inaccurate. Please tell me immediately if you notice an inaccuracy of a topic (so I know what’s true and what’s not true). In 25 minutes time, its hard to write down what seems right as an example (good thing the SAT doesn’t grade on what’s a valid example!)</p>

<p>Essay Prompt
<a href=“http://www.onlinemathlearning.com/sat-essay-practice.html[/url]”>http://www.onlinemathlearning.com/sat-essay-practice.html&lt;/a&gt;
November 2006:</p>

<p>Do we put too much value on the ideas or actions of individual people?</p>

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<p>There is not enough emphasis on the values and actions of individual people. Although some may argue that there is too much emphasis, that is not so. In fact, in our current era, we forget the ideas of those heroes in the past who have dearly contributed to the benefit of our society. </p>

<p>Ghandi’s philosophy, although great, has been given little thought. He preached a movement of non-violence, in order to demand Indian independence from the British Empire. At one point, when the British were abusing the Indians, Ghandi said to not attack, for it would only make the victums look like the crimminals. Today, his belief has little emphasis. The world today believes that war can solve any problem. Radical Islams, for example, believe the only way to make America realize its problems is to cause terror. The U.S., for example, has already been in Iraq and faced much violence from the locals. Because of a belief that violence, rather than non-violence, solves everything, Ghandi’s ideas are forgotten. </p>

<p>Martin Luther King’s ideas also need more emphasis. He preached non-violence in order to solve society’s biggest problems, such as Racism in the 20th Century. Even if the police attacked African-Americans, he still persisted, in order to show America the abuses African-Americans faced. As Ghandi did, MLK wanted to avoid being considered a crimminal by [not] attacking back. Today, MLK’s ideas also are forgotten. The L.A. Riots of 1992, for example, showed violence because of a racial incident when a African-American was abused by a White police officer. This incident caused many African-Americans to start causing pandemonium and damage across L.A. The violence that occured only shows how forgotten MLK’s actions are, especially with the aim to end racism at his time.</p>

<p>MLK and Ghandi both preached non-violence, but their actions and ideas don’t have enough emphasis to make a long-lasting impact. Although MLK was inspired by Ghandi, even after MLK’s time, the ideas of non-violence shown by these men is still absent. Our society has almost, if not, completely forgotten these men’s ideas, which aimed to help society.</p>

<p>this seems short, how many words is this?</p>

<p>I would avoid abbreviations as obvious, such as MLK, in real essays. It would be okay to refer to him as King. </p>

<p>Based on my own experience with the SAT essay I’d say that you would get around 10, a 9 if a grader is really harsh and a 11 if you get one nice person.</p>

<p>Agree with NoxLuminis, that essay would get around a 10.
Solid essay, although it is on the short side and the sentence variation is lacking. To me, this essay could be developed more strongly, as I feel like the same points are being reiterated.</p>