<p>Here it is(thanks a lot): </p>
<pre><code> “I love you, not only for what you are, but for what I am when I am with you.” It can be inferred from this quote that a romantic relationship influences the parties involved. However, is it true that a relationship continues to influence after it has ended? After examining several examples from literature and personal history, one may argue that it is.
One such example is “Allegiant,” by Veronica Roth. At the climax of this book, one of the protagonists, Tris, is killed. Her romantic partner, Tobias, is left broken and miserable. As time goes on, however, Tobias learns to get over his grief. Instead, he remembers Tris by thinking of her when making choices, trying to find what she would do and mirroring the actions. Tris was a major influence in Tobias’ life when she was still alive, and remained so even after their relationship was broken and she was gone.
Another example is from the same trilogy, in the books “Divergent” and “Insurgent.” Tobias’ mother, Evelyn Eaton-Johnson, was in a troubling marriage pre-book. In every incident she is a part of, however, Evelyn is influenced by her ex-husband; her actions always the opposite of what she believes would gain Marcus’ approval. In this way, Evelyn’s relationship with Marcus continues to influence her, years after their separation.
One may believe that relationships leave no lasting effect after they have ended, but when the Divergent trilogy is examined, it can be concluded that relationships do, indeed, leave lasting effects on the parties involved.
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<p>THANK YOU!!!</p>
<p>Also: The essay is missing the fourth paragraph (third example) because its something personal, but its about how one of my friends went through her parents’ divorce and its still affecting her…</p>
<p>4/6 - interesting examples with decent analysis (I’m assuming your third example has a similarly developed structure), but lacking in depth. Remember: 2 solid examples with developed analysis is better than 3 okay examples with underdeveloped analysis. </p>
<p>Lol on another note, I like that you used the Divergent series to create an interesting spin on the prompt; however, generally look to more intellectual examples (ex. classic literature, history, famous people, etc.). Just a word of advice for future essays. Also, make sure that you write a solid 400-500 words (or approximately 2 pages written) - the SAT graders, believe it or not, grade partially on the length of your essay. I have personal experience with this; I have written a pretty crappy essay (which I don’t advise you do intentionally) and still received a 10/12. </p>
<p>Good Luck! :)</p>
<p>Thanks a lot EngineBus2015!!! How do you recommend I strengthen it? Also- Yeah, its over 400 when I add the third paragraph.</p>
<p>Again-THANKS!!!</p>
<p>-Sprinkle in some vocab words (universal ones like plethora, paragon, etc. work), especially adjectives.
-Use solid literature/history/people/current event examples. Make a list organized by category before the test, and write attributes/themes common to each example. Because SAT prompts are usually pretty broad, these examples will work well on many prompts (as long as you have a solid list) and you will also be able to avoid writer’s block during the actual test. Just make sure you learn your list well.
-And as aforementioned, 2 examples with significant depth are always better than 3 examples with limited development.</p>
<p>Hope this helps! Good Luck! :)</p>
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