Grade my SAT essay please

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<p>Should people take more responsibility for solving problems that affect their communities or the nation in general?</p>

<p>This is my first SAT essay, so if you could also point out areas for improvement that would be great :slight_smile: Also, if the length matters it covered just over 1 and 1/2 pages of the sat pages, thanks for the help!</p>

<p>A nation in which people take responsibilities for the greater good of a community is indeed favorable over one that does not. However, with the structure of the majority of lives on our planet there is very little time; if any at all, that one would have available to spend on such responsibilities </p>

<p>On a macro level, the larger majority of people follow a standardized system, in which they go to school, obtain a certain level of education whether it be primary secondary or some form of degree. After which they apply for a job for a source of income. They then continue working until the age of around 65 before they retire and spend their remaining time living from their remaining income as well as support from the government. From this impression it seems that there should be an adequate amount of time to set aside in order to keep the community safe.</p>

<p>However on a micro level there are several duties that one must carry out throughout one’s life. These include finding a partner, looking after parents and looking after children. But it should be noted tat an exceedingly monotonous lifestyle is extremely unhealthy and should be balanced with social interactions, personal aspirations as well as taking breaks from the roller coaster that is life.</p>

<p>After taking everything into account it is evident that there is little to no time that can be set aside for taking responsibilities that affect a community or nation, and it could be argued that forcing such responsibilities upon a person can affect the health of that individual as it prevents the healthy balance that al humans require from taking place. In conclusion people should be able to take up responsibilities that are beneficial to the community but they should not be forced to.</p>

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<p>2/6. The essay is incomprehensible and the argument is conflicting:</p>

<p>“Yes they should, but they can’t, but they do on a micro level, but it affects their health, so they shouldn’t, but life is a balance so they should, but they should not be forced to”</p>

<p>Maybe that argument deserves a 1/6… I’m not sure.</p>

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<p>hmmm what you quoted wasn’t even in the essay, i didn’t say yes they should but they can’t… how’s your critical reading? or english in general? haha anyway my structure was it is ideal and on a macro level seems possible but when observed on a micro level, life is too busy and overworking can be potentially harmful especially if some time isn’t spent relaxing, so in conclusion people should be given the option and not forced.</p>

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<p>offtopic essay- 0</p>

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<p>Go ahead and ignore me, then. I don’t care if College Board gives you 2/12. I don’t understand what that essay is about; it is poorly written.</p>

<p>That’s ok, though! To improve your SAT essay writing skills, look up the thread “How to get a 12 on the SAT essay in 12 days…” (I think it’s something like that).</p>