Grade My SAT Essay

<p>The word “uncompromising” is often used as a compliment, especially when it describes someone who is completely dedicated to certain principles and values. Uncompromising people have indeed recorded great achievements. But being uncompromising is not always a virtue. People who are uncompromising tend not to consider other people’s views, seeing themselves as right and everyone else as wrong. All in all, it is better to be flexible and make compromises.</p>

<p>Assignment: Are people more likely to achieve their goals by being flexible or by refusing to compromise? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations. </p>

<p>Essay:</p>

<p>Although being uncompromising can help a person move a few steps toward his or her goal, it often leads to failure in the long run. To prosper in any aspect in life, the approval and alacrity of the public is needed. A building cannot stand without support. Support is needed. It is just as in the case of Adolf Hitler. He was not the most just and fair ruler, but his people gave him power because he was flexible. It is also as in the case of the American Civil Rights Revolution. The bigoted authorities did not heed their people’s cries for equality and were eventually overthrown along with their racist and biased principals. </p>

<p>In the first example, Adolf Hitler was an adroit speaker. He listened to the people of Germany and knew what they wanted. He also knew what he wanted. He was skilful at making speeches to the public and he used this skill to his advantage: he told the German’s exactly what they wanted to hear but was simultaneously hidebound by his obdurate beliefs and aims. It may be looked at as a form of manipulation but it was effective, and Hitler was not uncompromising. </p>

<p>In the second example, the United States before the twenty first century was a country of biased and unjust laws. The authorities of that time believed in the superiority of the white race. Over time, many people, such as Malcom X, began to rise in protest to these immoral beliefs and preached a lucid message to the public: they demanded equality. They demanded rights as human beings. But the authorities were just as tenacious. They refused to listen to the strong voice of the public and it was their stubbornness and uncompromising mentality that lead to their fall from power. </p>

<p>To conclude, it is worth mentioning that a person should have specific goals in mind and to stick by them. But it is just as important to be flexible enough to adapt to the public’s needs and circumstances. Listening to the public’s cries will determine whether or not a person will stay in power.</p>

<p>You can improve your essay by using better transition words (don’t use “in the first example,” “in the second example,”). And make the essay longer if you can (I know, I hate the length-score correlation).</p>

<p>I don’t have the mind of an SAT grader (nor do I aspire to/care to), so idk what grade I’d give…maybe an 8.</p>

<p>I agree that the essay should be made longer, not for the length-score correlation but that you’d do well with more substantive examples. Also, I had to look up alacrity, adroit, hidebound, and obdurate. Take from that what you will. With a little more meat to your essay, I think you could hit a 6/6, but I’d give this a 5/6 as it is. Maybe 4 if I was cranky.</p>

<p>I’ll try to make the next essay longer. This one took up 22 minutes though, so I don’t know how I can make that happen. @rspencec , @Omicron :Thank you for taking the time to read and grade my essay; it’s appreciated.</p>

<p>I think you need to be coming up with more examples or ways to further elaborate on your examples. The Hitler paragraph in particular could be easily condensed to 2-3 sentences. You should try focusing on throwing in events and dates and quotes from famous dead people and such.</p>